Saturday, 16 October 2010

First 250 Words Blogfest

During a happy blog hopping session, I came across this neat blogfest: Post the first 250 words to your WIP. You'll find the links to lots of WIP beginnings at Elle Strauss. This was meant to be posted yesterday, but I couldn't help giving it a go too :-)

Chapter One of Dog Show Detective:
Spade danced around Kitty’s feet, his enthusiasm showing he sensed a great adventure ahead. But then again, Spade sensed great adventures everyday.

Kitty wiped her palms on her crisp navy skirt for the third time, then she adjusted her black velvet headband for the fifth time.
“Quit fidgeting Kitty, you’ll be fine.” Mrs Walker looked up from her copy of ‘Dog Show World’.
Around Kitty’s ankles the black and silver dog jumped, turned and jiggled his behind.
“Maybe I should take Spade for a walk.”
Spade yapped enthusiastically and his short tail wiggled even faster.
Mrs Walker folded her magazine, placed it beside her fold-out chair and reached for Spade’s leash. “Good idea, a walk might calm you both down.”
Another mention of the word ‘walk’ did nothing to calm Spade. “Rup, rupt!”
Kitty furrowed her young brow. “He better calm down before the Junior Handlers comp. I’m not taking him in the ring like this.”
After snapping the leash to Spade’s collar, Mrs Walker pulled a brush out of her bag.
“Mum, I’ll brush him after our walk.”
“This is not Spade’s brush, it’s yours. You’ve fiddled with your hair so much you’ve mussed it all up, now turn around.” Mrs Walker started to rake the brush through Kitty’s straight, but tousled, honey hair.
“Mum, I can do it!” Kitty hoped none of the other juniors would spot her getting her hair brushed by her mother.
 The chapter goes on to have Kitty find a small lost dog on her walk which sets off the mystery - but perhaps I should be starting with the finding...  do you think I need a stronger opening hook? Will you be posting your opening? 

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